Friday, January 13, 2006

.::. Hello, Hello, Hello. .::.

Hello, hello, hello.
Can you hear me?
Please respond to me.
I'm dying inside.

Is this what you really want?
Is this how things will always go?
I can not help to dream,
That these days will end.

I'm standing in the rain,
Amongst my pain,
Waiting for you,
To come back to me.

I'm sorry for not being me.
I have made so many mistakes,
Hurtful painful mistakes.
Please baby forgive me.

posted by Phantasmal Spectre at 11:13 AM

1 Comments:

Blogger Anonymous Poet said...

Oh, the angst. Perhaps you might like "Rain" at my site.

Also, I notice that sometimes you use commas in the middle of your verses. But, sometimes, you do not. Perhaps you my try it with some commas, like this:


Hello, hello, hello.


Hello, hello, hello.
Can you hear me?
Please, respond to me.
I'm dying inside.

Is this what you really want?
Is this how things will always go?
I cannot help to dream,
That these days will end.

I'm standing in the rain,
Amongst my pain,
Waiting for you,
To come back to me.

I'm sorry for not being me.
I have made so many mistakes,
Hurtful, painful mistakes.
Please, baby forgive me.

Monday, January 16, 2006  

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